Monday, September 13, 2010

My Best Writing

I did well at adding a lot more adjectives, nouns, verbs, etc.
I learnt that just by adding a few little bits you can make your work a whole lot better.
Next time I will do better at making it interesting the first time.


  1. You've certainly woken this piece of writing up. There's nothing tired about these descriptions. Well done and keep thinking about the effect your choice of words is having.

  2. The story was AWESOME!! But maybe you should make it a little longer.